It wasn't square and boring, like others you might find.
No, it wiggled up and down in graceful undulations,
all fitted with a fine control for heating variations.
In winter you could turn it up, in summer turn it down,
but while it stood there empty, I felt like a clown.
So I filled it up with water, though fishes I had none.
It was sad to see it vacant. What was to be done?
Well, I stripped down to my shorts and slithered round the bends.
And this, I hate to tell you, is where my story ends!
Written for Mag #114 with thanks to Alex Stoddard for the original graphic.
glub glub...sounds like a pretty cool tank, but a bad way to go...
ReplyDeleteLOL...where my story ends!!
ReplyDeletealtered states
LOL Wish I had a tank like that :)
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ReplyDeleteHah! We both used "undulation" in our mags, but in totally different ways. How in the world you made the image all wavy like that is beyond me, but I am so glad you did because it improved upon the original and prompted a most entertaining poem!
ReplyDeleteTrying again...This was a witty response and the picture is so clever. Who among us, when seeing an empty tank, has not felt the urge to strip off and leap in? In future this cautionary tale will calm that urge.
ReplyDeleteA very excellent merging with gour fish tank, subject and object becoming One, sublime!
ReplyDeleteNice one! The last line is great!
ReplyDeleteI think another good treatment of a very silly picture. They deserve each other.
ReplyDeleteFantastic...love the direction and the distortion
ReplyDeleteLike it... sad ending though
ReplyDeleteGreat fun. Your rhyming and metre are so precise, a pleasure to read aloud.
ReplyDeleteGiggle...like that wavy kinda tank...
ReplyDeleteClever, clever take on the prompt...and ,of course, love the work in rhyme.Vb
ReplyDeleteAlex Stoddard is still in his teens and had produced some arresting photographic images. Pity about the one chosen for the prompt.
ReplyDeleteGreat verse and great fun. Hope the waves don't make the lad seasick!
After a Google search of his 365 project/images ... I must concur, this was not his finest. He is quite a talent!
DeleteAs always, you provide the proper chuckle!!
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